Day 27: Duplex for restless dreamers

 Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a “duplex.” A “duplex” is a variation on the sonnet, developed by the poet Jericho Brown. Here’s one of his first “Duplex” poems, and here is a duplex written by the poet I.S. Jones. Like a typical sonnet, a duplex has fourteen lines. It’s organized into seven, two-line stanzas. The second line of the first stanza is echoed by (but not identical to) the first line of the second stanza, the second line of the second stanza is echoed by (but not identical to) the first line of the third stanza, and so on. The last line of the poem is the same as the first.

Maureen Thorson at NaPoWriMo.net

We keep a sleeping bag between us.
Down shock-absorbs our dreams.

Down we walk, aboard our dream
mountain/spaceship, bobbing in clouds.

How your face shifts, bobbing in clouds.
Kicking pebbles down our dual hill into dim

flickering fables. Down. You will fill me in
when we awaken—what my shins and knees did.

Did you awaken from my spins—what these did
to your routes down your mountain? How my dream

boots found your mountain. How my dream’s
moose kicked your right hip—and your tale slipped

loose. Flipped your sky-ship. And your trail tripped—
though we keep a sleeping bag between us.

6 comments

  1. kim881 · April 27

    So nicely done!

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  2. Sonia Dogra · April 27

    Haha. There’s someone I was reminded of reading this. Because we kept, not sleeping bags, but a row of pillows between us.

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    • Alana · April 27

      Ah nice! Good to know we aren’t the only ones needing a safety buffer to share a bed 🙂

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  3. Romana Iorga · April 27

    Ah, those flickering fables! I love the playful language in this piece–and you nailed the form! I’m a fan of Jericho Brown’s work too.💜🍃

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  4. Manja Maksimovič · April 28

    Oh yes, a proper singalong. And it is rising somehow. Heavily enjoyed it. We keep a dog between us, incidentally. The dog insists.

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  5. revivedwriter · April 28

    This is so well written! I love the echoes not in the words but in the sounds of other words.

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